I would like to enquire about getting/gaining permission to sell/display/offer/show some of your company’s products. We would be interested in your products for babies and children.

We are running an English school and café. Our students, children and babies and their parents, come to our school every week and most of them have a break after their lesson or parents are waiting for their children during a lesson.

Would it possible to act as one of your agents and provide your some of your toys as a sample at my café? Almost all the moms including me want their children to try a toy before buying it because even babies have take a fancy to certain toys. I think it will be benefit beneficial that displayed to display your products and providing to provide a sample at my cafe is one of your publicity and help publicize your products.

We look forward to hearing from you soon.

Thank you for your time and attention.

Kozue

Managing director,

Happy English School

P:123 456 789

E: 11111111@happy-english.com

Dear Kozue,

Thanks for submitting the Week 4 email task. You have presented a great business email and have used English really well. I was able to understand everything you were saying even though you have a couple of grammatical constructions wrong. Well done.

Here are some suggestions and explanations to help you improve your English even further:

•When we talk about asking someone for “permission”, we either “get permission” or “ask permission” or “gain permission” or “request permission” (or similar) for something. We often follow the noun “permission” with a to + infinitive form of the verb that follows (eg: to watch, to hear, to see, to borrow, to hire etc) See these examples:

“She asked her father for permission to watch the film.”

She requested permission from her boss” (the “to + infinitive” verb is implied. She asked permission “to leave” or “to go on holiday” or “to take a break” etc)

•If someone is “waiting”, they usually wait “for” someone or something. See these examples:

“We were waiting for the taxi to come before saying goodbye.” (Not … waited the taxi to come….)

“They waited for their children to finish their lesson.” (Not …. waited their children …)

•“a sample” — we use the indefinite article (a/an) to refer to a non-specific or non-particular member of the group. For example, “I would like to go see a movie.” Here, we’re not talking about a specific movie. We’re talking about any movie. There are many movies, and I want to see any movie. I don’t have a specific one in mind. In your sentence, you are not talking about a specific product to sample; just any of the company’s products suitable for babies.

•“to take a fancy to” – this is an idiomatic phrase that we use to say that someone has developed a fondness or preference for something or that someone likes something very much.

“I have never taken a fancy to cooked carrots.”

“John took a fancy to Yuki at the picnic last year.”

•“Benefit” is the noun but you needed “beneficial” which is the adjective as you were using this word to describe your proposal – “it would be a beneficial proposal.”

•In your sentence I think it will be benefit beneficial that displayed to display your products and providing to provide a sample at my cafe we need to show the reason why you think it will be beneficial and you need to make it clear what “it” refers to. Therefore, we use the to + infinitive verb form. Sometimes the to + infinitive gives a reason for the adjective. Other adjectives that use the to + infinitive form are: disappointed, glad, sad, happy, anxious, pleased, surprised, proud, unhappy:

We were happy to come to the end of our journey

(We were happy because we had come to the end of our journey.)

I think it will be beneficial to display your product and help publicize it.
(It will be beneficial because it will help publicize the product.)
John was surprised to see me

(He was surprised because he saw me.)

Kozue, I hope this has helped you. Please let me know if you have any further questions. You are doing really well and I look forward to your next task.

Best wishes,

Jo